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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Most
food
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 that we purchase from small stores and super shops have chemicals in them that are more productive and ensure that lasts for long.
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, there is more concern about the negative effect. In my opinion, the disadvantages of
this
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 outweigh the advantages. There are several reasons that chemical
food
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 is very harmful.
Firstly
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, eating ch
emical
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chemical, food
food
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 can le
ads t
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lead
o cancer and other diseases. Certain preservation, including su
lfite a
the underside of a part of a building (such as an arch or overhang or beam etc.)
soffit
sulphite
soft
nd sodium benzoate, may cause adverse reactions in a small percentage of the population. Because when it is combined with acidic fo
ods it c
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foods, it
an produce benzene, which may slightly increase the risk fo
r l
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of
e
ukemia a
malignant neoplasm of blood-forming tissues; characterized by abnormal proliferation of leukocytes; one of the four major types of cancer
leukaemia
nd other types of cancer.
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, pr
eservation f
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preserved
oods are very hurtful for children. Increase headache, the incidence of attention disorder and other be
havioral c
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
hanges are all linked to preservation.
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, the recent survey by the Bangladesh health ce
nter f
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
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ound that for eating additive
food
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 one person out of ten is suffering from these types of health illnesses
such
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 as cancer, allergy.
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, the chemicals are added to
food
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 to fight spoilage caused by bacteria, mo
lds,
form in clay, wax, etc
moulds
yeast. Preservation can keep
food
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 fresher for a longer period of time, extending its shelf life as well as are used to slow or prevent changes in co
lor a
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
nd fl
avor.
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavour
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, much of the
food
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 we bring from the market which ensures that it will keep fresh many days due to mixing chemical. In conclusion, additive
food
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 can cause lots of disease problems,
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 there have some benefits.
Food
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 companies should explain
this
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 type of problem by any media
such
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 as advertising.
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