You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● explain where the money came from ● say what you intend to do with the money ● invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune.

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Dear Ali, I’m delighted to share

good

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the good

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news of getting

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a $

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millions

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million

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lottery in the recent draw of

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a $

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40 prize bond. I’ve purchased a single $40 prize bond from a person who intended to initiate a small business.

Although

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he had kept

this

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bond for five years, he wasn’t lucky enough to get

this

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large sum of money. I belong to the village where

there’s

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there are

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no basic health amenities,

therefore

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, I make up

mind

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my mind

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to build a basic health unit on our recently acquired land.

This

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will provide

the

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apply

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elementary health care services to the inhabitants of

this

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village, and most of the precious lives will be saved who used to

loss

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lose

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their lives on the way to reach the tertiary hospital located in a city. I and my father have

decide

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decided

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to celebrate

this

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ecstatic event with great pomp and show.

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, I invite you to participate in

this

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occasion

that is

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to be held on 20th April

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apply

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2020. In

this

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way, you can see the beautiful sceneries of our village in

this

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blossoming spring. Let me know as early as possible

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apply

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if you haven’t a problem

to take

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taking

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part in

this

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event. Regards, Nasir

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

196 words

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You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● explain where the money came from ● say what you intend to do with the money ● invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that sports teach children how to compete. Others feel that children can learn team work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that to benefit the development of a child, the mother and father should take parenting classes. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people today are not as fit and active as people used to be in the past and this is a danger to their long-term health. What do you think are the reasons for this ? What measures can you suggest to reduce this problem ?