People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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Nowadays, people
tends
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tend
to consume cooked
food
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from the restaurant than they did in the past. Processed
food
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makes it a lot easier and faster for a worker that needs to wake up early in the morning and have no
time
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to prepare his or her meal at home. Prepared meal teams to be more convenient and
time
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saving for workaholics. But there are some detriments to
this
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effect
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. On one hand, it is
time
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saving for people that leave home early morning. A banker that needs to wake up early in the morning to prepare for work doesn't have
time
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to prepare her meal. She has to leave the house so early in order to beat the huge traffic on the road. On her way to work she stops by a restaurant to grab herself some
food
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which is much
convenient
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more convenient
.
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, rather than not eating anything which might cause severe
health
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challenges, it is advisable for one to get already prepared
food
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at the
groceries
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grocery
store to mitigate the
effect
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of severe stomach upset.
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, processed
food
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could have
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effect
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an effect
based on the present
health
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challenges. With so much fat, salt and sugar it contains, could bring
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issues
such
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as diabetes, obesity, hypertension etc. Already prepared meal can make people fall ill due to some unwanted spices and
preservatives it
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preservatives, it
could contain that your body might not want.
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, a breastfeeding mother is prone to
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challenges and that of her baby due to the preservatives added. The diabetic patient doesn't need too much sugar, and just as salt riding the blood level of a hypertensive person when processed
food
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is being consumed too much. There are too many
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disaster
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disasters
in processed
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food but
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food, but
due to the fact that we cannot do without them keeps people going on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. All in all, it is much
time
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saving and convenient for people that leaves the houses early morning. But they should
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consider the side
effect
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it poses to human body as
government
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the government
needs to regulate the
food
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companies to cushion the
effect
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.

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