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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is positive or negative?

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There are an increasing number of businesses that permit the workers to do their job from
home
.
This
 way of working is bound to cause negative effects on companies.
This
 essay will discuss the disadvantages of working at
home
.
First
 of all, the major drawback of operating directly from the house is the loss of concentration.
Sorrounding
Suggestion
Surrounding
 themselves by other people, sometimes causes real problems for the
laborers
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
, preventing them from giving their absolute best.
For example
, noises inside the property may lead in making serious errors while completing a project.
Secondly
, the feeling of not being
underpressured
 by the time deadlines, could be a huge factor in putting less effort to complete the daily tasks.
Thirdly
, the absence of human interaction can be really hard for some employees, especially those who experience
troubles
Suggestion
trouble
 during work time, as it would take longer to find the solution from the calls or video chats, compared to asking the help of the colleagues. Not being able to finish a given duty, might cause a lot of stress for many people.
Furthermore
, men and women who do their job from
home
 usually live an unhealthy life, as they are
stucked
draw into the mouth by creating a practical vacuum in the mouth
sucked
tucked
 into the computer and have no physical activity. That often results in gaining weight faster compared to those working in a proper office. Occasionally a passive life is a
catalizator
 for different kind of diseases. In conclusion, the method of
wirking
actively engaged in paid work
working
 from
home
 must not be applied by companies, because it is a source for many problems of employees,
such
 as losing focus, lack of effort, difficulties in
fulfiling
put in effect
fulfilling
 daily tasks and living an unhealthy life.
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