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When choosing a job, salary is the most consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#job #salary #consideration
Nowadays, selecting a
job
 has become more difficult in the
job
 market due to some facts to consider. Most people consider
job
satisfaction
 and convenience as the most important thing and not really the remuneration. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 don't think
salary
 is considered an option when choosing a particular
job
. On one hand,
most
Suggestion
more job
job
 offer gives
satisfaction
 to it's worker. People take up jobs due to the
satisfaction
 they get from it. Most people choose to
work
 where they get more challenging task which brings out the best in them in order to give a reputable and satisfying output to the company.
For example
, when you have nice cooperating colleagues at the office and a good
managers
Suggestion
manager
,
Accept space
,
 it's
brings
Suggestion
brought
satisfaction
 to your life. Considering
salary
 is
good but
Accept comma addition
good, but
 not at the detriment of your happiness. Huge
salary
 gives you most of the material things you may want
such
 as fancy cars and big houses. Another reason is when you feel much convenient at your
work
 place. Most people take up a
job
 where they feel much convenient to
work
. Maybe, it could be the distance and the time at which they go to
work
 so they can
also
 meet up with other activities.
For example
, Mike my friend does a part time
job
 in a general hospital as a student nurse and goes to school as well, which is far much convenient for him even when the
salary
 is not much. In conclusion, choosing a
job
 with high pay
salary
 is one good thing but people should
also
 consider the personal gains
such
 as the
satisfaction
 and convenience it brings to your life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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