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As global trade increases, many goods, including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances. do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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Recently, due to the growth in foreign trade, most products, even those utilized frequently, are manufactured and are often imported from another country by means of transportation despite the far distance.
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 involved. One of the advantages of transporting items from other nations is so that we can be able to improve quality of life with various kinds of goods. Each nation is rich with diversity of raw materials,
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 have different expertise in different fields of life.
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, in China, they specialize mostly in manufacturing that some other countries do not have all the resources or the skills required to produce. Only foreing trade could have made accessible to them possible.
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 exchange process, the disadvantages of
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 of the rigorous process and the payment of taxes involved, it is
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 very risky. A trader may need to travel longer hours before moving any goods and services to their country of residence exposing him to the
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 of an accident, thefts or loss of goods in transit. In conclusion,
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 and the cost required.
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