Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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It is certainly true that

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traffic jam

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the traffic jam

is one of the biggest

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problem

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problems

all over the globe. In many cities people purchase their own

car

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has been growing so rapidly in the

last

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thirty years and due to increasing

car

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ownership many

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ownership, many

cities are now

became

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becoming

one big

traffic

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. I think

this

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phenomenon is absolutely true. In

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denotes a person or thing

this

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an analytic or interpretive literary composition

essay

I explain what measures government

take

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has taken

to stop using their own cars.

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with, There

are

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a plethora of reason that people start to buying their own

car

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Firstly

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, In the modern phase of life everyone is busy in businesses, jobs, study etc. They prefer to take a personal

vehicle

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to save their time. Another reason is that we

are not depend

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don't depend

do not depend

on anyone if our personal

car

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is with us

becaues

for the reason that; on account of

because

in emergencies cars are really useful.

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, Sometimes people

also

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need

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need a vehicle to

vehicle

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to attend meetings and ceremony that can be held in a very short time.

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, Increasing the

car

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ownership has a considerable

problem

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in all over the world and from

this

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in many

cities

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city

traffic

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issues are rapidly

gowing

(biology) the process of an individual organism growing organically; a purely biological unfolding of events involved in an organism changing gradually from a simple to a more complex level

growing

going

day by day. There are a numerous measures that can government take to discourage people from using their own cars. One of the major

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problem

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problems

is air

pollution

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due to

traffic

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jam. So,

Government

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the Government

can organise seminars for using less personal cars and give briefly explain about air

pollution

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that if we are not taking care of our

environment

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environment, then

then

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the day will not far at all that we

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quantifier; used with either mass or count nouns to indicate the whole number or amount of or every one of a class

all

are put in the trouble.

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, Another

noticable

capable or worthy of being perceived

noticeable

measure is that government

encourage

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encourages

people to take public transportation in use daily basis.

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society transporatatrtion

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society, transportation

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cheap

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cheaper

than

personal

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personal vehicles

a personal vehicle

vehicle

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. It saves us

lot

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a lot

of time and duo to

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also

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pollution

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will go

doen

spatially or metaphorically from a higher to a lower level or position

down

done

in control.

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, Due to

coronavirus

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our Indian Government will announce that 21 days of lockdown and no one should be

allow

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allowed

to take their personal

vehicle

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and in result

pollution

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ratio will down so rapidly.

IIt

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I It

is our onus that we have a knowledge about

traffic

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and

polltuion

undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities

pollution

. In the conclusion, from all aforementioned points, I hold my view that

Government

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the Government

must take measures to solve

this

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problem but

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problem, but

also

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it is our onus that we have to cooperate with it.

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