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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart compares the consumption
on
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 five primary categories, including food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing in four different countries in 2009.
It is clear that
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 consumers spent money on housing much more than that
of
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the other four categories shown.
By contrast
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, the percentage of citizens spending on health care was the lowest. It can be seen from the chart, the percentage of Americans allocating money to
‘housing’
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 sector,
around
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 26%, which was 12% and 9% higher than that for food and transportation respectively. Simultaneously, Japan invested more money
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 food, at just 23%, followed by 14% of Americans, 15% of Canadians and just 20% of the British. The proportions of the US and
Canada
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 purchasers expending on transportation were higher than the figures for the others, with around 17 % and 20% respectively.
On the other hand
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, healthcare and clothing were the least two expensive sectors. There were no significant differences in the proportions of the citizens of these
nations
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 spending on clothing, around 4 % to 6%.
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, the rate of expenditure for health care in the United States was 7%,
the
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 figures for
Canada
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Canadian
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 and
Japan
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 citizens were the same,
with
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at
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 4%.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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