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Band 4

Schools have a limited amount of money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spent on good teachers, while others say it should be used for buying equipment like computers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Educational institutions need to spend money in an effective way
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 Few individuals say hiring skilled
teachers
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 is the best way
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 a few others say investing
on
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latest
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the latest
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 technologies like software and automated equipment
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Lets
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 articulate both the views in
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the below
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below paragraphs
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 Quality teaching is dominant in the present
education
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 system. Effective teaching can make students knowledgeable. There is a lot of practice that can be done to
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 students
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with current trends.
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for
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a
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if a
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student
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 is poor in maths or science
subject
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, subject
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 teacher needs to take extra care of him
like
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 explaining the content in detail, preparing materials like slide presentations, etc. Good teaching can make the
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student
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 foundation strong and can become a fruitful achiever. If
teachers
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 are paid more
salary
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on their performance basis, they
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are
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 likely to show more interest
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, technology
growing
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is growing
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 rapidly in
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life. With the traditional way of teaching
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 technology will boost
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student's
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students'
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 intelligence.
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for
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 instance, at the school level, computer
education
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 can give hands-on programming skills to the
student
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. Conducting online classes can attract students who are not willing to come to school.
Teachers
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 can create Microsoft PowerPoint presentation slides
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 is
one
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of
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an effective
manner
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way
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 of teaching.
Nowadays
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 everyone is familiar with YouTube,
most
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 of the topics are learning by watching YouTube videos In conclusion,
although
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 hiring highly skilled
teachers
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are
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 considered to be beneficial for the educational system, technology
also
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play
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 a vital role in
student
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 life to boost their
education
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I
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support both views for the benefit of
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education
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the education
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 system.

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structure
Have a clear plan. Start with a short view of which side you take in the intro.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two reasons and an example.
coherence
Use linking words to move from one idea to the next.
grammar
Check grammar. Make 'technology' and 'teacher' agree with the verb and fix plural errors.
content
Give more real or clear examples, and link them to your point.
strength
The essay covers both views and ends with a view.
strength
There are some useful examples like computers and online classes.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • money
  • spend
  • spend on
  • cost
  • price
  • value for money
  • priority
  • quality
  • teacher
  • teachers
  • class size
  • teaching
  • training
  • professional development
  • motivation
  • feedback
  • learning
  • student
  • pupil
  • learner
  • equipment
  • computers
  • devices
  • tech
  • digital
  • access
  • information
  • skills
  • practice
  • learning tools
  • distance learning
  • maintenance
  • repair
  • long-term
  • short-term
  • impact
  • benefit
  • advantage
  • drawback
  • balance
  • planning
  • investment
  • policy
  • implementation
  • monitoring
  • outcome
  • success
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