Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Up to the understanding of some people, fauna, which live far from humans, will have no room for living.
therefore
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Therefore
, allocating money to protect them is useless, which I completely disagree with
this
assertion. In my opinion, there are vast places and habitats, which wild animals could live in
recent century
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recent centuries
the recent century
. Take oceans, which most species on earth are leaving, as a salient example. Not only do these oceans cannot employ for cultivating and settling but
also
they will be the habitat of many unknown species.
Moreover
, dozens of districts all around the world in which lions and tigers are living near humans for centuries like Africa.
Furthermore
, maybe in the future some species being distinct by natural forces or human interventions, but most of them will find a way to adapt themselves
with
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to
new conditions. To exemplify, after dying out of dinosaurs underground mammals found creative ways to new world.
Therefore
, ever-changing and adapting of fauna make them able to continue their life in untouched and harsh vicinity.
Also
, I reckon that protecting wild animals and their habitats are not
waste
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a waste
of resources. There
are
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is
a plethora of researches, which are proving the role of jangles in absorbing carbon dioxide and releasing oxygen.
Hence
, not only should we preserve them and inhibit
deforestation but
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deforestation, but
also
this
is a kind of funding
instead
of replacing other approaches to encounter with climate change and tornado for exam example.
Moreover
, are balancing weather conditions,
this
virgin
areas
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area
play
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plays
a pivotal role in absorbing heat, which emit to the earth and are diminishing these bad effects. So allocating resources to preserve them is the best investing method to save the earth and humans. In conclusion, I deem that not only
should we found
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should we find
should we found
in protecting wild
animals but
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animals, but
also
this
is the best way to save modern life.
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