You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

#country #study #job #friend #lives #help #plans

Dear Ann, It was so long time that I hadn't heard anything from you and

also

we hadn't seen each other since

last

summer. So I have good news! I'm going to come to enter your city's university

this

autumn. I have already found my surname in the entry list. I will study in the marketing department. My teacher said that we will have

flexible

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timetable. Due to my timetable, I think I could try to work after classes because I will have

some

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apply

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plenty of time

instead

of just spending my free time on the streets while going for a walk, I decided to earn some money. In

this

case, I would like to ask you for help in searching for

some

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temporary job for me. Unfortunately, I haven't any experience, but I'm a very hard-working, sociable person. So if you see some job offers which can apply to me, I would like to know about them.

Also

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what is about your

studying

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? Is everything ok? What is your work as a

shop-assistant

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shop assistant

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? Do you like it? Please, write me back as soon as possible. See you soon, Maria.

Mon Apr 13 2020

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secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
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for example
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although
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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

190 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational aspirations
Work experience
Financial independence
Resume (or CV)
Local job market
International student
Legal requirements
Student work permit
Employment trends
Time management
Networking
A part-time position
Balance studies and work
Job hunting strategies

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