In many Countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of Crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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problems
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has been increased
significantly
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the amount of
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if you watch the news you can see that the number of people
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people are living so fast that they don't even care about anything around them anymore
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the child who being
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abandoned
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drugs
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a sense
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to reduce the amount of
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you need to be closer to your children and help them understand the distinction between right and wrong since they just an
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we need to treat everyone equally and help the poor people so they will not
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crime
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help them to be
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there will always be people who
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reasons, but
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  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
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