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International travel is becoming coming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist do the advantage of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages

#travel #countries #doors #tourist #advantage #tourists
Since time immemorial
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humans and animals alike
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have valued the importance of travel. These days visiting another nation has become so easy and inexpensive.
Although
 some people think that travelling is not advantageous
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but it's beneficial for the tourists and the country they travel. Admittedly, there are several pros that it generates income which is beneficial for both private and public concerns
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it can provide employment opportunities and business opportunities.It increases cross cultural connections and most
importantly it
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importantly, it
 "puts a place on map".
For example
 Kenya
has doing
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has been doing
has done
lot
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lots
 of volunteer programs to increase tourism in their country due to
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 it provide
lot
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lots
 of employment opportunities.
Nevertheless
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it is easy to underestimate the scale of tourism
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every year
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billions
 of tourists take trips and due to
this
 there are many cons which affect the country in various ways like environmental pollution
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cultural clashes
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seasonal fluctuations
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pollution
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foreign poaching etc.
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: Bangkok is one of the most popular tourists destination in the world approximately 20.5 million tourists visited every year and they contribute city's air pollution. In conclusion
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although
 international tourism still
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 some potential disadvantages
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I strongly agree that benefits outperform cons
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