Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

In our modern life demand of public
websites
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web sites
is growing among all ages. But most people think that it is
dengerous
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
sharing their own dates. In
this
essay will to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
preferences and prejudices of those opinions
.
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The
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
mediums
like television
,
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,
radio
,
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especially and more common type websites need humans for relaxing and taking information
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Their convenience is that
,
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if someone want find data about history or modern technology or about
rich person
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rich people
and something they
want need
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want, need
only write topic before for searching information they should read thick tone books and spend more time for it. But now all things are changed. It
tekes
carry out
takes
few minutes now. And we have time other things to do.
However life
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However, life
is brief but there are more for doing.
An other
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Another
superiority is we can know the situation which are
happened
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happening
in the world setting at home
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All things have dark sites, it is not an exception
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The large number of people
use
it in unhealthy ways. Thera are among interesting
datas
the specified day of the month
dates
data
details
a lot of useless and meaningless videos which can destroy
younges
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
youngs
younger
mind and upbringing following that parents must pay
attation
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attention
their children and control them
.
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The minors share their own
informations
a message received and understood
information
and in fact that others want
use
this
own interest.
Additionally
, Some terror groups and religious extremist groups placed sites videos. From
this
they
to attract
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attract
young
,
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strong boys or girls to their territory. Sometimes offered large amount of cash
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In
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On
one hand social media is
dengerous
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
.
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There are people like
this
who
weste
spend thoughtlessly; throw away
waste
expensive time for
such
kind of unnecessary videos especially
young
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younger
generation members
.
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To sum up, unquestionably all things have two opposite sites media too. But it
depend
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depends
on which way you
use
. If we
use
it on
right way
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the right way
, it gives us more wonderful
datas
true confidential information
details
dates
data
and enriches our
knovlage
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
.

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