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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
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The given graph gives
the
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information about the
quantity
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number
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 of university
graduates
in
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of
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 both genders in
Canada
 between 1992 and 2007. Generally, the number of university
graduates
 in both genders in
Canada
 in a period of 15 years starting from 1992 increased.
However
, the figure for
females
 was higher than the
quantity
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number
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 of
males
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male
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graduates
. In 1992, the numbers of
males
 and
female
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females
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females
graduates
 hit the lowest points of around 70 000 and 100 000 respectively. From 1992 to 1998, there was a fluctuation between 100 000 and 105 000 in the
quantity
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number
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 of female
graduates
 in
Canada
. At the same time, the figure for
males
 fluctuated between 70 000 and 75 000 The period between 1998 and 2007 witnessed a significant rise
to
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95 000 in the number of
males
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male
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graduates
 in
Canada
.
Similarly
, an upward trend of approximately 48 000 was seen in the
quantity
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number
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 of
females
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female
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graduates
. Especially, in 2006, the number of
females
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female
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graduates
, which was half that half was
a
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half of that of
males
, reached its highest
points
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 of 148 000
while
 95 000
males
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male
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 students graduated in
Canada
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words quantity, graduates, canada, females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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