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I rarely watch television
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 I don'
t
 have a
TV
 in my room. I watch some series regularly, but I follow them online on my computer. When I watch
TV
, I generally prefer to watch film channels because I like watching
film
Suggestion
films
. I don'
t
 like advertisements on
TV
. They disrupt our pleasure of watching
TV
, but
on the other
hand they
Accept comma addition
hand, they
 are necessary for
TV
 channels to keep surviving. I don'
t
 think programmes on
TV
 are generally qualified because most of people who are educated spend little
time
 watching
TV
, so
TV
 channels try to attract those who are less educated, and
TV
 programmes are designed for them. I want to talk about a friend of our family. His name is Musa. We used to spend much
time
 together when I was a child. My parents used
to invite him our
Suggestion
to invite him to our
 home to spend
time
 together. I remember that they had much fun together. I didn'
t
 use to sit with them when Musa was at our home because I was a child, but I remember they used to laugh much when they were together. He was
also
 my
kirve
the trace of a point whose direction of motion changes
curve
 when I was circumcised. The
kirve
the trace of a point whose direction of motion changes
curve
kerb
 is a
person
 who helps the parents of the children who is being circumcised, and he is chosen among one of the best friends of the family, but it is unfortunate that we spend much less
time
 together now. If a
person
 can get along with all members of a family. We can consider
this
person
 a good candidate for family friendship. We are meeting different kinds of friends during our lifetime.
For example
, we know school friends when we are in high school, and we know colleagues when we start to work. Many say that friends from our pasts,
such
 as school friends, are more valuable than those who you meet with later, but it depends on the
person
 that you know. I think
it
it is
it's
 generally not easy for two people from different age groups to build up a friendship, but if those get along well and they have many hobbies in common,
this
 assumption can change.

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