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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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It seems that educational curriculum, in all levels, includes much more
fact learning
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fact, learning
 contents than practical classes.
Educational system
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The educational system
 is supposed to prepare students for their later life.
This
 means pupils should learn what they need for starting their carrier, in their school or college.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 need to learn practical skills as much as theoretical facts.
However
, educational institutions,
traditionally
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tradition
traditions
, focus dramatically more on academic courses.
In other words
, the majority of lessons are about "What" and "Why", and just
few subjects
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a few subjects
 revolve around "How".
As a result
, students have not sufficient opportunity to practice the learned facts and
thus
 are not able to internalize what they have learned.
Consequently
, students will not be well-equipped to find a proper job after qualification. Fortunately, numerous educational
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
, particularly colleges, are trying to immerse more practical courses into their program.
For instance
, the majority of universities have introduced a mandatory apprenticeship course before qualification.
In addition
, in recent years, an increasing number of teachers are attempting to teach pupils by assigning relevant projects to them. So that student can learn both facts and practical skills by doing the project.
Nevertheless
,
although
 these efforts can incredibly improve the pupils' knowledge, project-based courses contain only the minority of university classes. It seems that,
this
 kind of courses should be significantly increased. To sum up, the responsibility of schools and universities is to make people well-prepared for their life. For now the majority of students' time and energy
is spent
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are spent
 on learning abstract subjects. I personally believe, practical courses should be noticeably more interested, and a more satisfying balance between conceptual and practical courses should be maintained.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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