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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.

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The so-called ‘brain drain’ from poor to rich
countries
 is now robbing poorer
countries
 of essential personnel like doctors, nurses,
engineers
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and engineers
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, and the trend is set to continue, if not to get worse. Some
people
 say
this
 movement of
people
 around the
world
 is not a new phenomenon. Migrant workers have always been attracted by the wider choice of employment and greater opportunity in major cities in their own
countries
 and abroad. Recently, as the technological age has advanced and as richer
countries
 find themselves with not enough workers to feed their development, they have had to run to other parts of the
world
 to find the necessary manpower. Many richer European
countries
,
for example
, are now trying to attract skilled IT workers from my home country India by offering higher salaries than they could hope to earn at home. With the globalisation of the
world
 economy, many
people
 feel that the process cannot be stopped. Others, myself included, are of the opinion that measures should be taken to address the problem, by compensating poorer
countries
 financially for the loss of investment in the
people
 they have trained, like doctors and nurses. Admittedly,
this
 may be cumbersome to administer, but an attempt could be made to get it off the ground. Another step, which in part has already begun to happen, is to use the forces of globalization itself. Western
countries
 could encourage
people
 to stay in their own
countries
 by direct investment in projects like computer factories or by sending patients abroad for treatment, as is already happening. It is obviously difficult to restrict the movement of
people
 around the
world
 and it is probably foolish to try to stop it, but attempts should be made to redress the imbalance.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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