The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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in full-time and part-time discipline It is visible that, there are some changes in the sum of men and women in both, full and part-time

education

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regarding full-time

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increase in the total of female

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from 1970th to 1900th and in 1990-1991 the number of female

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noticeably changed in a positive way.

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men,

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declined in

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compare to 1970th and the statistics

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there is a slight augmentation in 1990th. When it comes to part-time

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, it is doubtless that female and male

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have chosen

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type of

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less before, but later

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changed and the number of

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increased year by year and

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augmentation is more for women in 1980198, but it is approximately the same in 1990-1991.

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