The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar chart illustrates statics about
men'
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and
women'
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women's
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involving
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in full-time and part-time discipline It is visible that, there are some changes in the sum of men and women in both, full and part-time
education
.
Firstly
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regarding full-time
education
, we will see that there is
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increase in the total of female
students
from 1970th to 1900th and in 1990-1991 the number of female
students
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noticeably changed in a positive way.
On the contrary
, for
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men,
students
' participation in full-time
education
declined in
1980th
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the 1980th
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compare to 1970th and the statistics
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that
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there is a slight augmentation in 1990th. When it comes to part-time
education
, it is doubtless that female and male
students
have chosen
this
type of
education
less before, but later
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statics
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changed and the number of
students
increased year by year and
this
augmentation is more for women in 1980198, but it is approximately the same in 1990-1991.
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