many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education others claims that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the word of work . to what extent do you agree or disagree

Today an ongoing debate is going
on whether
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on, whether
by completing
further
studies
in
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at
university or joining jobs directly after school leads someone
employes
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
employs
employees
employed
a good job
.
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.
According to my
perception both
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perception, both
the statements are true to some extent because there are some
profession
that require deep
knowledge
as well as some others needs work
experience
.
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.
To begin
with, higher studies
do not only gives
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do not only give
have not only given
us
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
also
the
mataurity
the period of time in your life after your physical growth has stopped and you are fully developed
maturity
.
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.
many
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Many
jobs like engineer
,
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,
teachers
etcetera
require basic information that can be gained in universities only.
for
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For
instance if
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instance, if
a
person
choose
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chooses
teaching
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the teaching profession
profession
after his
school he
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school, he
will most probably gain a lot of
experience but
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experience, but
a
person
who becomes
teacher
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a teacher
teachers
after his university degree can teach the students in a better way because he will have more
knowledge
than that who choose to
became
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become
a teacher after school.
Furthermore
, professions like fashion designing
,
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,
salesman,
etcetera
needs
experience
rather than
knowledge
.
one
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One
can do very
good
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well
in
these
denotes a person or thing
this
profession
even if he has not any university degree
.
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.
once
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Once
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
read a story about a
person
who was not good at studies but he became
most successful
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more successful
person
from his entire class and the reason behind
this
was that he choose the
profession
that needs
experience
.
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.
To recapitulate, both sides have
there
of them or themselves
their
own
experience
and
this
is difficult to decide which one is best.
However
, it totally depends upon a
person
that what kind of job he wants in
future
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the future
.
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