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many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education others claims that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the word of work . to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Today an ongoing debate is going
on whether
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on, whether
 by completing
further
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 studies
in
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at
 university or joining jobs directly after school leads someone
employes
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
employs
employees
employed
 a good job
.
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.
 According to my
perception both
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perception, both
 the statements are true to some extent because there are some
profession
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 that require deep
knowledge
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 as well as some others needs work
experience
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.
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.
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 with, higher studies
do not only gives
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do not only give
have not only given
 us
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knowledge but
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knowledge, but
also
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 the
mataurity
the period of time in your life after your physical growth has stopped and you are fully developed
maturity
.
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.
many
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Many
 jobs like engineer
,
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,
 teachers
etcetera
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 require basic information that can be gained in universities only.
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for
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For
instance if
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instance, if
 a
person
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choose
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chooses
teaching
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the teaching profession
profession
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 after his
school he
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school, he
 will most probably gain a lot of
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experience but
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experience, but
 a
person
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 who becomes
teacher
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a teacher
teachers
 after his university degree can teach the students in a better way because he will have more
knowledge
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 than that who choose to
became
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become
 a teacher after school.
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, professions like fashion designing
,
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,
 salesman,
etcetera
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 needs
experience
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 rather than
knowledge
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.
one
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One
 can do very
good
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well
 in
these
denotes a person or thing
this
profession
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 even if he has not any university degree
.
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.
once
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Once
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 read a story about a
person
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 who was not good at studies but he became
most successful
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more successful
person
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 from his entire class and the reason behind
this
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 was that he choose the
profession
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 that needs
experience
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.
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.
 To recapitulate, both sides have
there
of them or themselves
their
 own
experience
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 and
this
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 is difficult to decide which one is best.
However
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, it totally depends upon a
person
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 that what kind of job he wants in
future
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the future
.
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