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Some people think that computer games are bad for children, while others believe that they are useful. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of computer games and give your own opinion.

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In the 20th century, a bunch of new electronic devices
have been invented
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has been invented
 to meet humankind ‘s need. One of them that plays an indispensable role in people ‘s daily life is called the computer.
However
, computers have pros and cons.
Initially
, computers have the same functions as mobile phones or tablets, they can help us to keep in touch with our families, friends, relatives by using social networks like
facebook
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Facebook
, Instagram or Twitter,….
Morepver
in addition
Moreover
, you can
also
 strike up a new relationship with other people online.
Secondly
, students and undergraduate can receive their homework from their teachers via
mail box
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the mail box
such
 as email or gmail when they can not join
school
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the school
.
For instance
, nowadays, the corona virus has just
outbroken so
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heartbroken, so
heartbroken so
 they can use computers to do their
homeworks
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homework
 in an easier way.
Last
 but not least
,
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,
computers provide us entertainments like
wathching
the act of observing; taking a patient look
watching
 films or play online video games. But some of the students have abused these means of entertaining
for
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to
 a huge degree which result in their addiction, their decline in learning scores.
For example
, some students and their friends skip
classes
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class
 to go to video game stations or some female students may stay awake all night long to watch their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 movie. In conclusion,
computer
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the computer
 is an excellent
computer but
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computer, but
 we must consider our ways of using it and make it
an
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a
 useful device in our life.

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