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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#life #technology
Technology
 has influenced on our lives throughout human history, especially in recent decades.
In contrast
, some people suppose that te
chonology m
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
akes us more complicated rather than simpler. From my perspective, I disagree with
th
is viewpoints b
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this viewpoint
these viewpoints
y the following reasons.
Initially
, modern
technology
 plays an
c
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a
rucial role in our basis daily, helping us do almost everything faster and giving us more chances to interact with globe. Thanks to
technology
, most bu
siness a
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businesses
re completed well.
For example
, we can easily write ea
says a
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essays
nd prepare pr
esentation b
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a presentation
y Microsoft Word
also
 Po
werpoint o
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PowerPoint
n the PC.
In addition
, the existence of In
ternet h
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the Internet
as contributed to limit the distance between people together. Students has chances of making friends with foreigners and bo
arden t
make broader
broaden
heir horizons through using some social network in
t
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on
he Internet.
Moreover
, it is not too easy to deny the importance of televisions and music players with people. There help people to re
lxax a
become less tense, rest, or take one's ease
relax
fter st
ressful time a
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a stressful time
t work and schools. It can be seen that Internet, computer, television ar
e g
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is
r
eatest support o
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the greatest support
f people at the moment and future. Especially,
technology
 is the wonderful tool in most fields, especially public health. Doctors can have more problems if they work without
technology
. Medical equipments replaced doctors to take care and heal patients.
For example
, the globe ar
e facing u
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is facing
p to Corona Virus. Ventilators are major factors to support patients. The number of dead people will develop re
markably i
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remarkable
f we work without ventilators. Ai
rplanes,
trains and cars are supporting people in fighting with corona virus.
On the other hand
, people should not depend on and waste most their time on
te
chnology.
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the technology
Today, people choose to us
ing s
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use
martphones, computers more than hanging out and doing outdoor activities.
Technology
 makes people do not want to communicate their relationships.
Additionally
, te
chonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
such
 as smartphone, PC, television can lead to some health problems. Children easily have short - sighted eyes if they spend various ti
me o
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times
n te
chnolgy d
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
evices. Parents should control them and teach them how to use
technology
 suitably. In conclusion,
technology
 ar
e m
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is
ore complicated, our life are mo
re easier a
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easier
nd better. People should respect the contribution of te
chnoloy w
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
i
th h
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to
u
mans l
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human
human's
ife. They
also
 need to have a suitable plan wi
th u
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by
sing te
chnolgy a
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
nd limit ch
ances o
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the chances
f taking full ad
vantages o
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advantage
f them.
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