Some parents are worried about increasing levels of violence in TV,Video games and other entertainments for Children's leisure. how does this affects the children? how do you think this can be tackled?

There is an increasing number of violent information showing in many entertainments, which is a worrying issue for the majority of parents. In
this
essay, I intend to explore the source of
this
problem along with some possible solutions to it. Chief among the causes of
this
problem is that children may not be aware of imitating the negative behaviour from TV, online or social media platforms and cause a threaten on society.
This
is due to many kids do not have enough of certain knowledge to recognise the right or wrong contents in the entertainments, which could result them to do dangerous movements,
such
as stealing items in the shops, treating strangers for money and so on. Another contributing factor is that no matter playing video games or watching TV programmes, it has a huge impact on children, neglecting their homeworks and
this
will
also
delay their learnings at school. In order to resolve children absorbing too many negative thoughts from entertainments, I believe we must
first
address its root causes. Perhaps the most effective methods of doing
this
would be for parents to spend more time getting involved with the Children's pastime. The aim is to let parents educate certain conducts to their loved one, which would assist each individual child to understand the dangerous actions in the virtual reality. One
further
measure is that pupils need to be taught how to recognise and report inappropriate behaviour.
This
,
hence
, could reduce other students to obtain misunderstanding information from TV or games. In reality,
this
problem is unlikely to be resolved in the short term.
However
, I believe that the measures outlined above would constitute a good
first
step.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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