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limited money should be spent on computer equipment or a good teacher. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are many people who are thinking we should not spend more
money
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 on
computer
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equipment
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 or good teachers. While others have a contemporary point of view about
this
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 given statement. According to my opinion, limited
money
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 should be invested in
computer
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equipment
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 and a little more
money
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on
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for
 a good
teacher
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. I will discuss both viewpoints in the upcoming paragraph. To commence with, a good
teacher
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 can teach us everything from the beginning.
it
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It
 is a very good idea to spend more
money
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on
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for
 a good
teacher
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 than
computer
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equipment
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.
we
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We
 can learn practically as well as theoretically from a
teacher
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 to enhance our knowledge. With the help of a good
teacher
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, we are being able to perform well in an interview and we can get a good job on our own ability.
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, without a
teacher
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, we cannot make the difference between classwork and homework.
a
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A
teacher
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 is the only person who is showing us a corrective path to be successful in our life.
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, a
teacher
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 always teaches us how to tackle personal and professional obstacles. So, there should not be any doubt to spend
money
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 on a good
teacher
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.
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,
computer
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equipment
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 is important to operate any
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computer but
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computer, but
 we cannot learn more realistic. There are many people who are just playing games and watching movies all the time because they are addicted to doing
this
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. In
this
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 way, they cannot achieve anything in their life.
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, 90% of people do not need to buy
equipment
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 because they do not know how to operate
them but
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them, but
 still they are wasting their
money
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 on speakers, CPU's and so many other
equipment
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. In the end, they are just losing everything because they do not have
knowledge
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the knowledge
 or qualification to get a good job.
in
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In
 conclusion, no
matters
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matter
 how urgent you need to buy an
equipment
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 for
computers one
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computers, one
 should give priority to spending their
money
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 on a good
teacher
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 because we can achieve everything that we want if we have a good
teacher
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 in our life.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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