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To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors.

When the issue of improving the quality of
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the university
, there
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exist
 conflict opinions. While some people believe that
university
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 should
increase
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 salaries for
university
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 professors to achieve a good, high-quality education, others argue that
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 method cannot bring about the improvement in the quality of education. From my point of view, I strongly agree that the rise in annual
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 will exert a positive impact on the quality of the
university
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 for the following reasons.
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, it will
increase
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 the efficiency of the lessons. To be more specific, the
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 in
salary
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 will create motivations for professors to modify their teaching methods to
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merit
 the raise.
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,
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increase
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 lessens the financial burden of lecturers and helps them more concentrate on their teaching.
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, when having more financial support from the
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, the professors are less likely to hold a
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 job and have more access to academic knowledge
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 as online courses or lessons.
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, not only it can decrease the teacher absenteeism but it can
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 help them develop a teaching career.
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, it will create a positive school environment. As mentioned above, the rise in
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 will lessen the financial burden and encourage teachers to pay more attention to their students.
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, it will result in a positive impact on
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students'
student
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and motivation.
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, when professors are in a good mood, they will deliver better lessons and likely to give students good grades. Eventually, it
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creates
 a closer bond between students and professor, which encourage student attendance and ensure the outcome of the
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.
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, some people still hold the notion that the professors nowadays have enough money
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appropriate to; intended for
for
 their living. It is not the case since professors with high degree have a higher expense since they need more books, conduct a lot of research which have assistance.
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, they will
favor
promote over another
favour
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 which offers them a high
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 to pursue those activities. In return, these professors will provide better direction and methods for students.
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, they can use games or technology to help students have a familiar approach and gain a better understanding of the knowledge.
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 will help universities have a good reputation to attract talented students and professors. In conclusion, it is highly recommended for the
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 to raise the
salary
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 of a professor to
increase
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 efficiency, create a positive environment and attract more talented students and professors.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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