The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
According to the
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bar chart illustrated, it shows the
percent
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percentage
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of
teachers
by gender male and female in some different types of educational
settings
in the UK in 2010. There are six types of educational
settings
, including
nursery
/pre-
school
, primary
school
, secondary
school
, college,
a
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private training institute and
university
. As it is obvious from the bar chart, the
percent
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percentage
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of women is decreasing
while
the education levels are going higher from pre-
school
to
the
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university
.
However
, the
percentage
of male
teachers
are
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is
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completely
vise-versa
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where the
percent
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percentage
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of
pre-
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preschool
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school
is
in
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at
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the lowest and it is the highest for
university
matched. For three educational
settings
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,settings
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the
percent
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percentage
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of female
teachers
are
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is
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more than 50 rate which includes
nursery
/pre-
school
, primary
school
and secondary
school
and the
percentage
of college is equal to male
teachers
around 50 interest.
Additionally
,
the
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private training institution and
university
educational
settings
are having fewer female
teacher
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teachers
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less than 50
percent
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.
On the other hand
, a few male
teachers
are playing a role in the
nursery
/pre-
school
level compared to female ones which
is
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are
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around 5
percent
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per cent
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. The primary
school
also
is showing that the
percentage
of male
teachers
are
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is
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lower than 10
percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
, for the secondary
school
, college and private training
institute
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,institute
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the
percentage
of male
teachers
are
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is
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around 45, 50 and 55
percent
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per cent
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respectively.
Additionally
, the
percentage
of male
teachers
for
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at
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university
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the university
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level is the highest around 70
percent
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per cent
show examples
.
Overall
, the chart shows that higher educational
settings
are more male-dominated.
However
, women have a significant presence
in
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the
nursery
/
pre-
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preschool
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school
level.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, teachers, settings, nursery, school, university, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • educational settings
  • primary
  • secondary
  • tertiary
  • adult education
  • vocational training
  • private tutoring
  • disparity
  • dominate
  • majority
  • minority
  • gender distribution
  • workforce
  • trend
  • ratio
  • comparative analysis
  • significant difference
  • visual representation
  • data interpretation
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