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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table reveals,
the
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data about the six underground railway systems in six cities around the world.
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
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 the sizes of these systems vary
according to
 the different cities. It is important to note that,
London
 has not only the oldest
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 but
also
largest
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the largest
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kilometres
 of
the
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subway systems.
In
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 opened in 1863, but
number
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a number
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 of
visitors
visit
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visiting
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this
system
are
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 lesser than
Paris
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. It has only 775
visitors
 per year as compared to
Paris
. The underground
system
 of
Paris
 has the
second
 largest
number
 of
kilometres
. It has almost half
number
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 of
kilometres
compare
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 to
London
. The underground
system
 started in Tokyo in 1927. It has the highest
number
 of passengers, but
kilometres
 are lesser than
Paris
 and
London
. It has only 155
kms
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km
 than 394 in
London
. In the case of Washington, DC, the
kilometres
 of the route
are
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 higher as compared to the
number
 of passengers. It has 126 km, but
visitor
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number
 is only 144,
it
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 is drastically lower than
Paris
 and Tokyo. Kyoto has not only the smallest
number
 of routes
,
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 but
also
 the less
numbernumber
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number number
 of
visitors
 as well. The km of
route
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 is only 11 and only 45
number of
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visitors
 visit
this
system
 per annum.
On the other hand
, the latest subway
system
 started in 2001 in La Angeles. It has
lesser
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a lesser
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number
 of
kms
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km
expect
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except
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 Kyoto. It is only 28.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, kilometres, number, visitors, system, paris with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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