nowadays it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated to marine parks for the purpose of education and entertainment. Do you think advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

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The question of moving ocean creature by their natural habitat
to
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in
captivity is
one
of the
topic
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topics
that bring to heated arguments
animalist
a living organism characterized by voluntary movement
animals
and scientist
,
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,
because of it's the opposition between the right of freedom of the animals and the scientific research. Obviously every animal should have the right to be free, because for
me it's
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me, it's
an unfair treatment for a living creature
,
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,
that use to
swin
travel through water
swim
through the oceans, eat the product of nature, hunt prey for its surviving,
been
the state or fact of existing
being
caged in an
acquarium
a tank or pool or bowl filled with water for keeping live fish and underwater animals
aquarium
or in a little piece of sea
that is
incomparable with natural space and
,
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,
basically to depend by a human that eliminate all the wild
instict
inborn pattern of behavior often responsive to specific stimuli
instinct
because it is dangerous for him.
This
situation is comparable to a prison for a person, where you can't do anything and your living space are limited
,
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,
but with a fundamental difference that
in
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at
majority
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the majority
of the time you go
in
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into
to
prison for your own fault, but for the animals it's a sentence decided by no
one
.
Moreover it's
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Moreover, it's
the worst approach to study an animal because, in
this
contest it behaves in a different way
,
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,
and you can't see
one
of the typical of a predator
,
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,
the hunting. The best method for me is observe them in their natural habitat, in
wich
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
it can interact with all the different life forms. In the other hand cage an animal for entertainment is
one
of the worst things that a human can do,
it
it is
it's
assimilable
to
a
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an
animal behaviour. In short, in my opinion disadvantages of
this
development outweigh the advantages
,
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,
and
then
the only thing that we can
do it's
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do, it's
to leave all the natural things and the life forms where they are if the aim of moving it is recreative of scientific.
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