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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts give us
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information about the proportion of the
population
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 in different age groups of
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and the expected target in 2050. In
Yemen
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, it is noticed that the percentage of the ages
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0-14
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 held
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half of the
population
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. But in 2050, the government expects to let the number of 50.1
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 to 37.0. At the same time, the scale of ages from 15 to 59 which was 46.3% in 2000
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 to
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% in 2050. What’s more, Different
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the
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Yemen
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, the age groups of the portion of
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population
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 in Italy held the largest part in 2000 was 15-59
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 which achieve
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61.6%. In the later
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, it
expected
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 to
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 15.4
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. The age group over 60 occupies the
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 place in the total
population
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 and looking forward to
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an increase
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increase
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of 18.2
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%
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 2050. The scope between 0 and 14
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 slightly in 50
years
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. In summary, the main features in
Yemen
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 are increasing the percentage of the ages, which
over
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 60 and 15-59 and the group of 0-14 get a slight loss. Italy expects a big rise in the proportion of people aged 15-59 and a relative decline in the groups
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over 60 and 0-14
years
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, yemen, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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