The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
leisure
time
in a typical week in hour
enjoyed by males and females of different employment Fix the agreement mistake
hours
condition
between 2012 and 2013.
Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
It is clear that
most of the employment status
of males enjoyed leisure
time
are
more than Unnecessary verb
apply
the
females.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, there are
three type of Change the verb form
is
status
that are employed in
Change preposition
apply
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
, unemployed, and retired show that the number of leisure
time
enjoyed by men
were slightly more than women
with above 40 hours
in
employed Change preposition
apply
in
full Change preposition
apply
time
of men
, and about 80 hours
in unemployed and retired of men
.
Other than that, there are
two Change the verb form
is
type
of Change to a plural noun
types
status
that are employed in
Change preposition
apply
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
and housewives show that the amount of leisure
time
enjoyed by women
were more than the men
with 40 hours
in employed in part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
of
Change preposition
apply
women
and 50 hours
in housewives of women
. However
there are no Add a comma
,However
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
enjoyed
Correct pronoun usage
who enjoyed
leisure
time
in this
two Correct determiner usage
these
type
of employment Fix the agreement mistake
types
status
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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure, time, status, men, women, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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