The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
number
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a number
the number
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of
leisure
time
in a typical week in
hour
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hours
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enjoyed by males and females of different employment
condition
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conditions
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between 2012 and 2013.
It is clear that
most of the employment
status
of males enjoyed
leisure
time
are
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apply
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more than
the
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apply
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females.
Overall
, there
are
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is
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three type of
status
that are employed
in
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apply
show examples
full
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full-time
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time
, unemployed, and retired show that the number of
leisure
time
enjoyed by
men
were slightly more than
women
with above 40
hours
in
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apply
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employed
in
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apply
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full
time
of
men
, and about 80
hours
in unemployed and retired of
men
. Other than that, there
are
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is
show examples
two
type
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types
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of
status
that are employed
in
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apply
show examples
part
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part-time
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time
and housewives show that the amount of
leisure
time
enjoyed by
women
were more than the
men
with 40
hours
in employed in
part
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part-time
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time
of
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apply
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women
and 50
hours
in housewives of
women
.
However
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,However
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there are no
male
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males
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enjoyed
Correct pronoun usage
who enjoyed
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leisure
time
in
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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two
type
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types
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of employment
status
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words leisure, time, status, men, women, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time employment
  • part-time employment
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • housewives
  • gender comparison
  • notable differences
  • allocate time
  • trend analysis
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • societal norms
  • economic factors
  • gender-specific trends
  • employment transition
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