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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

#climate #change
Some say that
this
 is
also
 a kind of friendship. I am not totally sure about it. Yes, you can share something with
this
 person, you can have fun together online, but I think being a
friends
Suggestion
friend
 requires more,
such
 as knowing each other very well, but virtual friendships generally lacks of it. They may even change some of our character traits, if we let them to do so. They can have influence on our likes and dislikes. They can even affect our relations with our parents if we are young and let them to do so. I don't think it is very essential to have a friend from different culture, but if you have one, you can expand your view of life because different cultures generally perceive the life differently, and you can
therefore
 gain a new perspective. Roughly speaking, adventure and strategic games are popular in my country. People like to play
such
 games because
such
 games are gripping. I don't like playing games because I can easily lose my interest in a game. I think that they generally learn it by trial and errors or by watching some tutorial videos. I can talk about
open
Suggestion
the open second-hand market, which
the open second-hand market which
open second-hand markets which
second
-hand
market
 which is located very close to my place. I am living in a place where many students
resides
Suggestion
reside
, so there is an open
second
-hand
market
 which
set
Suggestion
sets
 up early on Fridays
.
Accept space
.
 It closes before the midday so you need to hurry up if you want to shop from
this
market
. You can find anything that you can imagine in
this
market
,
such
 as
second
-hand
casettes
a container that holds a magnetic tape used for recording or playing sound or video
cassettes
, records, books, small household items. The advantage of shopping from the
market
 is that you are likely to find what you are looking for, and it is likely to be much
more cheaper
Suggestion
cheaper
 than its tag price.

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