Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?
It is often argued that some employees cannot afford to
workout
when they are at workplace or in their leisure Suggestion
work out
time
and it leads their
health badly. objective case of they
them
Although
workers have not enough time
to exercise
, I personally believe that they should workout
. Suggestion
work out
This
essay will address the both sides why they not have
enough Suggestion
don't have
exercise
and what solution would be suggested for them.
First
of all, the reason that they have not so much time
to train is unflexible
incapable of change
inflexible
time
. Nowadays, people have to do a lot of things such
as work, family chores and social activities. For example
, some people should work hard to earn some money for their rent otherwise
they not pay
the rent, are going to lose a place to stay. Suggestion
don't pay
Moreover
, some of them have to feed their children because this
is the obligation as the parents. As I mentioned, people do not have enough time
for exercise
for some
reasons.
one or some or every or all without specification
any
On the other hand
, when it comes to resolving this
phenomenon, government
could support them. The government
should provide the people as a welfare because they pay taxes for it. For instance
, when government
implements the welfare, people might take Suggestion
the government
more free dime
due to sufficient money. They can hire a babysitter for their children or pay rent Suggestion
a more free dime
for
example
Accept comma addition
example, then
then
their free time
to exercise
will be increasing.
In conclusion, less spend time
for exercise
might be harmful workers
Suggestion
workers'
health but
the Suggestion
healthiest, but
healthiest but
government
can help them to improve their lifestyle. Also people
could control their Accept comma addition
Also, people
time
for it.Submitted by davidjeong90 on
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