Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time discus both these views, and give your opinion

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to be active. Many schools nowadays have different kinds of extra activities like games, art, and music so that with the

student

can take part in the activities according to their own wish. The schools are

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having sport activities in order to inspire students to take part. A parent can encourage to help

student

to participate in the sport games which are organised by the school. By participating in sport games children can learn many essential qualities like teamwork and leadership, which will help them in future. If

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

physical education (PE)
holistic development
lifelong healthy habits
academic performance
core subjects
teamwork
discipline
social skills
critical thinking skills
information age
balanced approach
holistic education

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Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time discus both these views, and give your opinion

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Many cities have installed cameras in public places in order to reduce crime. However, some people think that those cameras restrict our privacy. Do you think the advantages of this system outweigh the disadvantages?

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