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News plays an important part of most people's lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead?

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In our
society
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 news has a significant role, it is part of many people routine. Daily people rely on the media to keep them informed about global or local problems that might affect
they
of them or themselves
their
 lives.
However
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, the tendency of journalists to choose
negatives
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negative
 headlines are producing a distress
society
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 point of view, people are feeling hopeless about the future.
This
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 feeling is
also
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 creating a new market for happier contents, as more people are looking for good news to increase
they
of them or themselves
their
 mental health. Reading or watching news allowed one to take informed decisions and develop a better comprehension of the world.
Additionally
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, news can shape the
society
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, revolutions were able after the pressure of the population informed through the media.
Other
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Another
 example of the importance of the media is the reaction of people to the new pandemic, even some governments trying to
minimalize
make small or insignificant
minimize
 the risks, the populations
is urging
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are urging
 for actions. The concept of people tends to find bad news more interesting has some explanations. Ignoring bad news could bring harmful consequences,
that is
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 the case when a severe storm is approaching. It is
also
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 believed that people think if they are aware of the danger than can somehow avoid that to happen to themselves.
In other words
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, people might read negative headlines to avoid or prepare
from
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for
dangers
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dangerous
danger
 situations and because normally it has a potential to affect more people.
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 the increase of bad news can lead to a
misperception
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 of a constant danger and anxiety in the spectators. Some people are already avoiding read daily news and searching online for positive facts to increase
they
of them or themselves
their
 well-being. Good news
also
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 has the power of
inspire
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inspiring
 and
motived
provided with a motive or given incentive for action
motivated
motivate
 individuals to do good actions and transformed
they
of them or themselves
their
them
 community. To conclude news plays an important responsibility in our
society
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, as a source of information and knowledge. Even though
bad news
Suggestion
the bad news
 is important to create awareness about problems and possible dangers is leading to a feeling of depression in the population, which could be transformed with a growth of positive news.

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