Some governments spend a lot of public money training up individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays we can see that governments spend so much public
money
to
gain
become part of; become a member of a group or organization
join
in international sporting events, while, a part of
population
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the population
prefer that would better, whatever,
money
should
spent
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spend
on something which may
benefits
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benefit
. In
this
esay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
say
I'm going to tell why I can agree, while, I
can not
can not
cannot
. One of the
reason
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reasons
why I
'm disagree
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disagree
'm disagreeing
'll disagree
disagreed
've disagreed
, because governments should spend on something which can aid,
also
, helpful for everyone. Despite that giving
money
on that which cannot have spectacular, better help to
general public
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the general public
.
For instance
, present home for
poor
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the poor
,
Accept space
,
giving them
meal
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a meal
or whatever, have much
money
may build
home
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homes
for homeless people. What is
more they
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more, they
can take care about animals
such
as homeless cats and dogs. In
this
way population of
this
city will pleased for governments.
On the other hand
, I definitely agree with
this
statement, due to sports play
significant role
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a significant role
significant roles
. So, governments
must to spend
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must spend
money
to
successfull
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success
successful
in international sport.
For instance
, in Olympic games athletes should be introduced their country
,
Accept space
,
also
, should must be ready in high level to have
gain
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gained
. So all of them should be paid by governments, because they're
fase
not in accordance with the fact or reality or actuality
false
safe
foes
of their country. To sum up, I can say that
money
should be spent on international sport,
also
, in something like public which has benefits.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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