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Task 1: The graph below shows the quantities of goods transport in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

Task 1: The graph below shows the quantities of goods transport in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line chart illustrates the number of products shipped in the Unit Kingdom by various types of transport namely, road,
water
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, railway and pipeline from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all
type
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types
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 of
transports
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transport
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 experienced an upward trend, in which the road always was
a
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the
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 mode of transport which people used the most, following that were the
water
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,
railway
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the railway
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 and the lowest was the pipeline. There was a slight increase in the number of transports by
the
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road from 70
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974 to 82
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990,
then
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 it continued to rise gradually to 97
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
At
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In
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 the beginning, the amount of shipped the pipeline was at 4
million
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tonnes
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, by 1994, it
grew
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grown
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 moderately to 22
million
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tonnes
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 and by 2002,
this
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 figure still did not change. In 1978, the
amount
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number
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 of goods shipped by the rail line and
water
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were
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was
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 the same at 40
million
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tonnes
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. There was a fluctuation in the number of
transporting
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transported
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 by
the
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railway,
while
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 the amount
of
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apply
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shipped
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shipping
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 by
the
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water
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 climbed slowly to 68
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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