More and more people nowadays are buying fashionable clothes. Does it have a more negative or positive effects?

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It is true that, people have more tendency to wear fancy clothes these days. wh
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here are advantages to wearing fashionable clothes, I personally believe drawbacks are far more. on
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he one hand, many commentators justifiably argue that there are disadvantages to wearing stylish clothes. From their point of view, pursuing new trends and fashion can lead to a dramatic increase in consumerism and advertising facilitates
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issue. Since advertisers focus on selling their new goods, they persuade people to purchase a product that they do not need. They
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use the influence of social media like Instagram and introduce their new chic clothes by glamorous bloggers and encourage consumers to follow the latest trends.
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, we are compelled to live in co
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a consumer culture
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not beneficial for people and society. It is
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maintained that, when people wear new-fashioned clothes unconsciously they get far away from their regions traditional clothes and
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they should maintain their culture, they gr
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he other hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that dressed in good taste has several benefits. They argue that, while a person dresses well and fashionable they attract more people and
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argument convincing because personality and the way people act is more important than their style. In my personal opinion,
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wearing fashionable clothes might have positive sides, the drawbacks are far more. Wearing new-fashioned clothes have adverse effects on
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onsumerism and traditional clothes.

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