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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the number of social networking sites visited by internet
users
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 in Canada between 2014 and 2015. We can see from the data that, many people
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 social media
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on more
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 than one platform. The number of
users
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 who did not use any social networking site slightly decreased from 22
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2014 to 21
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2015. The highest proportion of
users
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 that used only one site dramatically declined from 36
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2014 to 28
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2015.
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, the number of
users
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 who use more than two social networking sites gradually
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 about 1
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percent
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per cent
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 to 4
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percent
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 in 2015.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words users, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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