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In some countries, changes in the amount of rainfall have led to a serious shortage of water and governments are now under pressure to find solutions that address this problem.

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The shortage of
water
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 resources in few regions has caused a
government
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 to find solutions, and as these nations face a challenge due to lack of rainfall.
This
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 could have an imminent effect in the future, if the answers are not found in time. There could be many reasons behind
this
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 problem, and I intend to discuss it and provide a possible solution in
this
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 essay.
To begin
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 with, many people believe that
water
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 scarcity is because of overusing by the population, and by the farming industry.
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, people leave their tap open, when washing dishes or take a longer shower than they need, and the farmers leave their
water
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 sprinkler on for days.
This
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 results in wasting
water
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, and
thus
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,
causes
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cause
 a
water
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 supply to be diminishing.
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, another possible reason could be that changes in climate, as many climatologists have been warning the
government
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 to respond to
this
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 issue, by taking drastic actions to curb the problem to become bigger. To name a few, pollution, which releases from factories and motor vehicles is one of the main causes for the shift in amounts of rainfall, which results in scarcity of
water
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. The solution may sound simple and straightforward;
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, many could fail to comply with it. The advocate of saving the
water
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 says that the population should take care when using the
water
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.
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, they should not leave the
water
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 running while they
washing
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wash
 dishes, and could limit the shower
to
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in
 a few minutes, rather than having a long shower.
On the other hand
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, farmers could save the
water
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 by using a timer, which automatically turns off the sprinkler, once
it
it is
it's
 finished with the
water
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 usage.
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, the
government
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 could impose a higher levy on the motorist, and on factory owners to reduce the levels of pollution. In conclusion, individuals and farmers
needs
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need
 to consider to conserve
water
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 for the future generation, and a
government
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 should play pivotal role in imposing stronger policies to protect the continuity of
water
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 supply.

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