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The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that modern families
do not have
Suggestion
did not have
 meals together as often as in the past. Reasons for
this
 vary, and there are several impacts on both households and the community as a whole. Family members today rarely eat meals together because of several causes. The hectic
work
 schedule is often considered the main reason why individuals now tend to resort to prepared meals to save time for
work
. As
such
, the tradition that parents came back from
work
 to cook lunch for children is no longer preferable in many countries, and
this
also
 explains why the fast food industry is developing fast in
this
 country. Another contributing factor is that culinary skills
are no longer passed
Suggestion
no longer pass
 on to younger generations. Food outlets and restaurants today offer a wide range of food choices that can satisfy even fussy eaters, meaning that cooking is not necessarily a skill that young people need to learn to cook for the family. The gradual disappearance of family meals has several effects.
Firstly
, having meals with family members is a great chance for them to bond with each other, so parents have less time to talk with their children, and spouses
also
 lose an opportunity to share daily stories. On the social level, some traditions may be lost
as a result
 of people eating out too often. Family values might not be appreciated when people do not feel the need to come back home after
work
 for a meal. On special occasions
such
 as New Year Eve, family feasts serve as an important event, and it is regretful that
this
 tradition is gradually disappearing. In conclusion, various factors are attributable to the disappearance of family meals.
This
 has several damaging effects on both families and societies.
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