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More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, car and other items. Why is it? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In modern life, most people purchase luxurious things
such
 as the kind of brans of clothes, cars and other items. They have several reasons for themselves about
this
 shopping.
This
 essay will take on the positive aspects
this
 shopping can have and
also
 the negative effects on development.
However
, the negative impacts seem to more important than positive effects. Evidence suggests more people prefer to buy famous brands. The main reason is, they want to show off,
for example
, they show cars to other people, it means, we have enough money and we can buy something luxury.
For example
, ford cars. The
second
 reason is, people think if they wear luxurious clothes, they seem to be a nice or younger face. In every country and every time, modernism has the positive and the negative effects.
In addition
,
this
 topic has both effects. Because when people prefer to buy luxurious things the consumers sales things and maybe it can help to the economy or it can survive society that recession. The negative effect is, the difference between poor people and wealthy people will more and more. Despite, some people don’t enough food, but some people have a lot of luxurious clothes or other items. It is a bad effect on the society. Summery, considering the points discussed above, today, some people want to buy famous brands and it has some various reasons. It is some positive and negative effects on society
such
 as
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 development in the world.

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