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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

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Over the years, taking a gap year between hig
h-school an
a public secondary school usually including grades 9 through 12
highschool
d going to
university
 is becoming a common trend. I reckon that, the main advantage of
this
 trend is that it gives sufficient
time
 for a teenager for
le
Suggestion
to
arn new skills, develop himself and getting sophisticated for any challenges in
university
life
 On the one hand, taking a gap year have some beneficial sights for adolescents. It gives spare
time
 to individuals for enhancing themselves and attending in a business
life
 could be more useful in the teenager’s
university
life
. Running a business enables to gain money and students could meet the entry requirements for
university
 entrance by themselves.
Furthermore
, it is proven that in tee
nagerhood mo
st of children have no idea what they want to be in their future
life
 and
therefore
, the parents interfering in their child’s
life
 and com
pelling th
the act of compiling (as into a single book or file or list)
compiling
em in selecting profession.
Thus
, when you have to choose a profession for studying in
uni
versity it
Suggestion
the university
 is important to reach to maturity for
re
Suggestion
to
ach a decision and find yourself Despite advantages, there are
also
 some disadvantages and the main one is
time
 wasting. In these age groups
time
 is precious,
therefore
 some people believe everything must be done on
time
. According to the scientists, more than half of the teenagers who take a gap they never be able to achieve success in their education
life
, since the precious
time
 that could have been spent in productive activities at the
university
 is wasted at home. In conclusion, in spite of some beneficial sights, everything has to be done in
time
. In order to achieve success in carrier, tertiary education is essential and hereby adolescent ought to avoid from
time
 wasting

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