Nowadays more and more researches are being carried out and sponsored by private organisations. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages in such cases?

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My name is Cicianne Miranda, I work at Compass Minerals in Brazil. I am a great admirer of your work. After being inspired by your book “Lean in” and the three pieces of advice about female leadership, I decided to create a Mentoring program for Women here at Compass Minerals. I believe that we need to support each other as well as to promote ourselves so that, together, we can increase the numbers of women in leading roles within organizations. The industry that we operate in Brazil (Agroindustry and chemical) is mainly led by men, and we are working on to change these numbers. Our executives will mentor our potential women so that they are prepared to take on senior positions within the company. We chose you as a great inspiration thanks to your admirable work trajectory and

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in women's empowerment. I would like to ask you to send us some words of motivation and inspiration to these women, your words will make all the difference to start Mentoring with great strength. Thanks in advance!

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

176 words

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private sector
efficiency
accountability
competitive nature
practical applications
innovations
intellectual property
patents
economic growth
scope of research
fundamental research
research agenda
biased outcomes
accessibility
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Fully explain your ideas

More and more people today are visiting extreme places such as Antarctica or the Sahara desert. What are the advantages or disadvantages of such travels?

While some suggest the best way to combat climate change is by having a carbon tax on large corporations’ activities, others think that individuals paying tax on their own carbon footprints will have a greater impact. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

What skills are taught in school in comparison to what is needed in actual life.

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Computers have made the world a better place to live in. Do you agree or disagree?