- Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Adventurous sports like

paragliding

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Paragliding

and mountain climbing are gaining popularity among different age groups. These days,

majority

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the majority

a majority

of the people are participating in these thrilling activities and sometimes risk their lives as well. There can be different reasons behind

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it, but

I will discuss some of them now. The one possible reason for people risking their lives is that many times they are unaware of the danger associated with a particular activity. Having incomplete information about the sports, often results in critical situations.

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, people’s behaviour

also

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leads to serious issues.

For instance

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, overconfidence and exaggerating one’s own capabilities, without paying attention towards reality exacerbate the circumstances.

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, in the flow of adrenaline rush and curiosity of attempting these breathtaking sports, ignoring the safety precautions and measures leads to devastating situations. People really need to understand that the trend of endangering their lives into

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activities is not going to be fruitful. There have been cases where families have lost their loved ones just because of ignorance and arrogant attitude. Some people have either lost their any body part or became paralysed for

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the rest

of the life.

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, the person who tries

such

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life threatening stunts will not be the only sufferer; the families

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had to pay for the consequences. To conclude, I can say that,

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yes, there

is plenty of danger in extreme sports and deterring ourselves not to participate in it, is not an effective solution. All we need to do is to analyse and study details prior to

attempt

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attempting

any activity. Preparing ourselves physically and mentally in

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utterly

important. And

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but not the least, we shouldn’t forget about our family and their guidance should be followed strictly.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

282 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Adrenaline rush
Thrill-seeking
Personal growth
Accomplishment
Resilience
Risk management
Social recognition
Adventurous spirit
Endorphins
Fatality
Risk assessment
Cultural phenomenon
Recklessness
Safety precautions
Extreme sports

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