Men do most of the high level jobs are done by men. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women ?Give your own opinion.

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, I assent with the author.In my country we can see discrimination between male
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female and in the most situation men is benefited adverse is true for women.
Most renowed position
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The most renowned position
Most renowned position
are secured
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is secured
for men.
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, basically if we observe on manager
,
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,
senior manager
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managing director
posts
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posts, then
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these positions possess to men and very few women are employed in these
positions but
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positions, but
if it is observed
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you
can see the lowest positions the most women work in.In garments sectors approximately 8 million people work and in their 80% are women.Women are given significance in
the lowest
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the lower
lower
the low
and middle positions of employment.
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For
me,
Government
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the Government
should think about
women
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women's
employment.Because
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graduation level are anomalous for girls and boys so the way of graduated boys that are
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for graduated girls.After completing
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study
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the study
studies
if boys deserve
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employment
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employment, then
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why
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girls.Girls are paying
same money
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the same money
for
study
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,
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learning same subjects
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procedures are same
then
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why conspicuous jobs only for men.If
Government
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the Government
gives privileges for women
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women won’t be deprived
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of
their rights.
Goverment
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Government
should keep distinct percentage positions for girls
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the competition will be licit
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women will be encouraged more that’s why boys will become serious about
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.Now-a- days boys are
accustoming
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accustomed
on other things as like as cigarettes
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crickets
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hanging with companion that’s why they can’t give time
properly
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proper
on their
study
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but as always girls become more serious.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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