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Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People hold different views about whether children are highly affected by television and friends or family. In my opinion, I consider that family has more influence on children and both arguments will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, children can broaden their
outlooks
Suggestion
outlook
 by technological developments
such
 as televisions. By watching different TV programs
such
 as science or about
development
Suggestion
developing
 countries’
cultures children
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cultures, children
 can acquire more knowledge and they can have very well
worldview
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
. Another very convincing argument is that friends can easily motivate and understand their peers more than family. They get suggestions or advice from each other because they have almost similar minds and feelings.
On the other hand
, I
also
 share the idea of those who consider that family plays a pivotal role in children’s mental or physical development. Parents or siblings are more familiar with children’s
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 or characters due to strong family bond.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 can easily help children to choose
right way
Suggestion
the right way
a right way
 in their predicament.
Moreover
, family always pays attention to children’s education and motivates them to buckle down.
As a result
, children will become a rich and socially influential person in the future. In conclusion,
although
 a group of people believe that television or friends are the main parts influencing a child’s development, I side with those who consider that family’s role is more important.
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