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The graph shows oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.

The graph shows oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates
oil
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the oil
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 production capacity for six Gulf
countries
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 over the
four
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period
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periods
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 of time from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, Saudi Arabia predominated the amount of oil production over the periods
while
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 Qatar remained the lowest oil production capacity over the
four
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 years.
Whereas
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 other
countries
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 shared
the
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a
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 similar level. Most of the
countries
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 experienced an increased trend except for Qatar, which
leveled
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levelled
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 out over the years. Saudi Arabia started with a little above 8
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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V barrels per day in 1990.
Consequently
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, it surged by approximately 6
millions
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million
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 over
four
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 periods. Among the
countries
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 with
the
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a
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 similar level of capacity, Iran was slightly more than others which reached
to
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apply
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3
million
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 in 1990 and slightly rose to more than 4
million
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 in the
last
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 year.
While
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 others reached
to
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apply
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slightly below 4
million
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 in the
last
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 year.
In contrast
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, Qatar remained well below the others with
estimated
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an estimated
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 1
million
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of
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apply
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Barrels over the
four
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 years with 2000 obstructed a little bit but
then
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level
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levelling
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 out again.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, four, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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