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Some people believe charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own countries. Others claim that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both opinions and tell which side do you agree?

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Non profit organization plays vital role in helping needy people in the world. It's heated debate that charity should provide resources in their respective country only or they should help other countries
also
.
This
 essay will discuss both the side and provide the evidence why a Non Profit management with enough resources must help others
also
. To embark on, organizations in countries which are developing or underdeveloped should only provide resources to people living there. To illustrate, in countries like Africa there has been already a shortage of resources and material so there charity should only help local people as they are the one who gives donation in the country.
This
 way they can
also
 know where their money is being used for.
Therefore
, NGO's in these countries must fulfil their demands
otherwise
 it will provoke them against them.
On the contrary
, an organization which has enough resources more than their respective country need should help other countries and their people.
For example
, UNICEF an international charity which received from worldwide for the welfare of the children has a surplus of money and material and
also
 their nation just need less than half of it, they should be giving some helping hand to undeveloped and developing places.
Thus
, big NGO's must help other small non profit companies. To recapitulate, wealthy nations well funded NGO's must help other nations too, but nations which are not developed their organization just help their people. It will ultimately create harmony and peace in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charity organizations
  • help
  • people in their own countries
  • people in need
  • nationality
  • global solidarity
  • root causes
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • local community
  • international aid
  • balance
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