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Many students find it difficult to learn subjects like mathematics and philosophy and hence they should be optional in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #subjects #mathematics #philosophy #schools
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It is
undeniable fact
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an undeniable fact
 that subjects
such
 as mathematics and philosophy are difficult for many students.
This
,
however does
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however, does
 not mean that these should be made optional at school level. Children need to master at least the basic concepts of these subjects to be able to
get on their lives
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get on with their lives
. Not all students want to be engineers or bank managers but they still should be able to do addition and subtraction. They should understand the concept of multiplication and division. If they lack these skills, they will find it difficult to manage their everyday
life
. Mathematics plays a crucial
nrole
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no role
n role
 in our
life
. Children will not remain children for
life
. They will become adults a few years down the lane and
then
 they have to manage their finances. The fact that they do not have basic mathematics skills will
also
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 their employability. The same is true in
case
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the case
 of philosophy as well. It is not a subject that all students can digest.
However
, it offers a better perspective on
life
 and helps us to cope with
ups
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the ups
 and downs of
life
. The existing education system allows students to choose subjects of their preference when they start university education. In my opinion children should be taught all subjects at school. To conclude, I strongly disagree with the view that subjects like mathematics and philosophy should be made optional at schools
such
 a decision would go students more harm than good.
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