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Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the Internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other people believe that access to the internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services.

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Nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
 information is transmitted over the Internet. A strong dependency on
this
 medium has been created, as personal, political and economic news and information are shared through it. As the Internet is so widely needed, many people believe that governments should provide
this
access
 for free. Others believe that Internet
access
 should be paid for. Before the creation of the Internet, people had phones, newspapers and televisions; nowadays the Internet can replace all of these. Society is now built on a system that relies on everyone having
access
 to the Internet, whether
this
 be in school or in work life.
However
, while it is seen as a basic necessity in western cultures, the costs for accessing it are still too high for some people. When
this
 point of view
is taken
Suggestion
takes
 into account, it can be concluded that governments should provide
access
, or a division of inequality will be created in society.
However
, when one takes into account the things that the Internet has replaced, it becomes apparent that most of these are not free as well. It is necessary to pay for phone calls, for television and for newspapers. Storing all the information and passing it to consumers through the World Wide Web
also
 entails costs.
This
 raises the question whether the Internet should be handled differently. Providing Internet
access
 to everyone would mean a significant cost for the governments, especially at times of economic crisis.
Therefore
,
this
 is not a plausible solution to integrate each individual
into
Suggestion
in
 the society. In my opinion, while the Internet has become as necessary as a phone, governments should not provide it for free, as the money needed for
this
 would put too much strain on public resources.
This
 finance could be used for even more urgent topics,
such
 as poverty and starvation.
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